Okay, here they are, in no particular order, Lyric No-no’s. And I’ve added image reinforcers for the visual learners out there.
Don’t use big, complicated words. I struggle with this because I actually like big, complicated words. Words like succinct, contrition, ambivalence. They say exactly what I’m trying to convey. But ‘convey’ and ‘succinct’ are not words most people use in conversation and they don’t sing well. Imagine it in a song. (Cue soft strings and a whiny trumpet…’if I could convey my love, succinctly, you would finally understand, If I could separate myself distinctly, from the women who don’t love you as I can, bo-dee-bo-dee-boooo’). Yuck. It sounds awful in my head.
There are some notable exceptions. ‘Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious’ But that’s a novelty song really. How about Faith Hill’s first big hit ‘This Kiss’? Check out the chorus:
‘It’s the way you love me
It’s a feeling like this
It’s centrifugal motion
It’s perpetual bliss
It’s that pivotal moment
It’s, ah, impossible
This kiss, this kiss (unstoppable)
This kiss, this kiss’
Notice the words are used to repeat a rhythm. They have a function in the song separate from just their definition. That’s how she got away with it. There are ways to bend the rules.
To understand how simple can be better, listen to Motown hits…‘Ain’t no woman like the one I got’, ‘Someday we’ll be together’,‘If I were your woman’,‘Just my imagination’…the titles are great and simple and direct. That’s why they work.
Don’t start rhyming…yet. Writers love to rhyme. They love showing how clever they can be. They love showing off. This is more a critique of the writing process than anything. I have written with people who immediately want to start rhyming, before we even know what the song is about. And then the song runs off into a thousand different directions and we are all feeling very vague and trying to rack our brains to find a new rhyme for ‘love’ or ‘you’? Ugh.
Come up with a great title, concept or a killer first line. Worry about the rhymes, the second line, after the song has a real direction and viewpoint.
Figure out who you are singing to, figure out who the singer is, figure out where they are and why they have to break into song to get their emotion across. Good writers who sing and are instrumentalists accomplish this while they are goofing on their guitar, keyboard…they channel it vocally. Lyricists without musical chops are at a disadvantage, unless they can hum and type at the same time.
Eventually the rhyme will propel the music and the song, hopefully. But if you start too soon, it’s like crawling into a little cardboard box and pulling the flaps down. Now you’re crammed in tight and in the dark and you can’t find a way out. This is what some people (who only write when they are ‘inspired’) call ‘writers block’. It’s not a block. It’s a hollow box, with tiny little walls and you created it by rhyming too soon.
Don’t fill in all the blanks. Let the listener engage their imagination by not spelling out every single detail. One of my favorite songs of all time is ‘Free Fallin’ by Tom Petty. Here’s verse one and two:
‘She’s a good girl, loves her mama
Loves Jesus and America too
She’s a good girl, crazy ’bout Elvis
Loves horses and her boyfriend too
It’s a long day livin’ in Reseda
There’s a freeway runnin’ through the yard
And I’m a bad boy, ’cause I don’t even miss her
I’m a bad boy for breakin’ her heart’
So, we know who she is, we know she’s a good girl. We know she’s patriotic, religious, romantic, loyal, possibly from the South, or a farm. We know he broke her heart. I would argue if he’d kept going and explained exactly WHY or HOW he broke her heart, the song might be ruined. Maybe he cheated on her, left the small town for the big city, maybe she was pregnant and he abandoned her because he didn’t want to settle down. Who cares. Instead, he says:
‘I’m free, free fallin’
And the following verse never really goes back to her, and it totally works, because the song isn’t titled, ‘I’m So Sorry I Left You Darlin’, it’s ‘Free Fallin’ because there’s some sort of elation in doing the wrong thing that’s right for you.
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